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| Gentle. Edge. 2007-10-15 ch 20,  | abuseNice job. :) |
| Gentle. Edge. 2007-10-14 ch 14, | abuseHow could her grown father get beat up by his 7 year old son? |
| Gentle. Edge. 2007-10-14 ch 10, | abuseI know some stories really need drama but you're just putting way too much in it. I think if you ever decide to revise this story to maybe make it a bit more simple or to have the drama spaced out more. |
| Gentle. Edge. 2007-10-14 ch 1, | abuseThe grammar could use some work but I loved the way you started off the story. It was original and totally hooked me. However, her little brother seems a bit unrealistic. How could such a young kid play so many instruments especially without a parent pushing them to concentrate on it? I know some kids could do it, but it's just not an everyday thing. |
| ohitislove13 2007-07-25 ch 20, | abusethis story was just.. amazing i love the whole incorporation of your guardian angel by red jumpsuit apparatus i gotta admit, i cried. great job. :) |
| FemFantome 2007-07-24 ch 17, anon. | abuseOMG I LOVE THAT SONG! ^^ Nice chap, the tension and emotion rocked. |
| FemFantome 2007-07-24 ch 6, anon. | abuseWoah is right! THAT ws awkward! XD |
| Last.Real Record Store onEa... 2007-07-19 ch 20, | abuseBeautfully scary. Loved it. -favorites- |
| FlameKnight 2007-07-09 ch 20, | abuseNot Bad |
| Alisha Maloni 2007-07-09 ch 20, | abusei LOVED your story. i read it at least three times. keep up the excellent writing! and the sequel is awsome so far. >: ) |
| spiraling downward 2007-07-07 ch 1, | abuseI really really love the story. There are great characters. My only bit of critisism is that i think Liam acts a bit too old for his age. I know he's really smart and he's been through a lot but there are time that the way he interacts with Rhuben is a bit too mature at times. Take the advice or leave it. your story's really great |
| writing.life.2.4 2007-07-06 ch 20, | abuseOMG! I luv this story... It's so real and true. The character relationships and personalities you nailed. I'm now racing to go read the sequel. You are so talented and gifted when it comes to writing. NEVER give it up. |
| Fleeting Moment 2007-07-06 ch 20, | abuseAH, HE'S BLIND! LIAM OO POOR LIAM! UPDTATE! |
| xsweetxsacrificex92 2007-07-06 ch 20, | abuseno no no you not allowed to end it there! you can't! Make a sequal. your writing is amazing. like i could see what the characters went through thats how real your writing is. you have to keep going! |
| Alice Heist 2007-07-05 ch 20, | abuseaww. I mean, I loved the ending, but I wanted jayden and Rhuben to make out [cough] I mean, up, before the end of it. oh well, it was absolutely fantastic. i loved it keep up the good work! |