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| aprettywar 2008-04-30 ch 1,  | abuse"the very essence of carefree." i love all of the images put forth in this poem. she's the girl you want, the girl you wish you were. great job! :) |
| Xerophyte 2007-11-15 ch 1, | abuseThat is quite an interesting essence of carefree, I must say. Carefree is usually associated with happiness and sunshine and just loving life, but here you associated it with "condescending." I love it! It kind of caught me off guard, which is an excellent tool. It also reminds me of my summer ex. The sunshine and... Anyway. As usual, wonderful poem. Thanks for your review! Sorry it took me forever to get back to you. |
| fairytale failure 2007-07-09 ch 1, | abuseI just love this. You make such a beautiful picture here - and of course, we've all met someone like that so it is really relateable. The word choices are so great it is almost like I can see the person you're talking about. It's awesome. |
| bittersweet.season 2007-06-30 ch 1, | abusethis is the girl that everyone wants and wants to be and loves and hates and honey, she's insubstanital as a dream. the perfect summer fling indeed. great write. |
| she smolders 2007-06-16 ch 1, | abuseJust adorable, and heartfelt, and perfect. I love the way you describe her and the wistfulness beneath your words. And the first line just puts a smile on my face. Take care. |
| Morgan Duriya 2007-06-11 ch 1, | abuseI like it! Its really good. Well I guess one good thing came out of all of this... you have writting material. At least she cares. Well I heart this and you of course!:) Love ya! |