Wow, you actually wrote het this time!

eep. YOU'RE writing het and I'M writing slash...gah! It's the apocalypse! lol.

Anyway...

Ooh. I like this. Angsty and dark. I assume she kills him? And it's short...like always. Don't get me wrong, that's your style and it works!

p.s. I'm working on an angsty slash story. I think it' purdy good...so far. I'm determined to make it more than just 1254 words or whatever my last two have been.

buh-bye!

Interesting. Is this it or is it going to expand into a longer story?

Anyway, good start! It's simple yet still evokes powerful imagery.