Wow. Very interesting mechanism you used there with the shape of the poem. I don't quite understand the meaning of the poem, but I really enjoy the phrases that you create. "Hearts widowed by time," I especially liked. I think that the closing lines are especially powerful. Very interesting poem. :)

-Jesse

Beware the review marathon! (Link in my profile)

This is a very visually interesting poem. I don't quite how you managed that but it's very effective.

Partly because of its shape, though, I find the words lose a bit of their impact. Its harder to trace the line of thought. And the line of thought seems very abstract.

- Esther, currently reviewing for the Review Game's Review Marathon (link in my profile)

I take back wat I said about ur best poem before, I think THIS is your best poem! hehehe, it has a little drop.

I would tell you what my favourite lines were, but they were all my favourite lines! I wish I could write like you...:'(

I like it, especially the shape. Couldn't quite string it together in my mind to say what makes it so appealing. It just is.

awesome shaping！that must of took a while ：）

however， i must ask why you capitalised every new line even if it was in the middle of a sentence

or perhaps you wanted it to break off into a new sentence？

：P good job anyways！ keep it up