this is very true!

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Well, I really enjoyed this piece. I liked how the rhyming was obvious but it didn't feel forced. Also, I liked the fact that this piece was short and sweet. If it had gone on for longer it would've been rambling and re-stating and sometimes that can work but not for this. Furthermore, the whole idea of the piece intrigued me. Why is it that we would die without the rain? There's the obvious answer that we can't live without water. And then there's the not so obvious one that's open to interpretation. Nicely done.

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Interesting word choice in this. It sounds very old-fashioned. Which I think is somewhat refreshing from the many rain-themed poems here at FP. It gives this a little more originality compared to everything else.

And your rhyme is cool. When I started reading, I didn't expect it to rhyme, so it was a nice touch. It helped the poem to feel more poetic. This /is/ so short, so I liked how, despite the small amount of words, you effectively made your point and still sounded very poetic.

-Peach/Kate

Seems informal, the the rhythm makes up for it. Perfect length, leaving a trail of thoughts =)
~fleur

Oh, I liked this. The rhyming at the end was smooth and didn't feel inconsistent with the remainder of the piece.

I also liked the topic. It's a good thing to remember.

I do feel it could've been more poetic and stronger, but it's fine as it is; straightforward in its message.

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I love the 'die' and 'I' rhyme. I like this poem, yeah, and true I think. :) nice one!

Back for dessert.

It's raining here, so this looked like a quick treat that fit my mood.

Punctuation - good. I could see this without any (more fluid in keeping with water) but overall I think the pauses add value.

It holds together with a clear rhyme/reason. I would however have liked it to be longer. Rain has so much imagery it felt a bit wasted.

*goes in search of more cookies*

B.D.

Short. Simple. Sweet.
'God is in the rain.'

I love it! Sure, it's a bit short, but it's cute and clever. It's almost like a haiku in that you get straight to the point. It works. Nicely done!

And I agree. We need rain here. Our garden is doing terribly. :-\

I liked this piece because the rhyming was nice, but not awkward like happens a lot in short pieces. I also like the message because it is so true. Nice job!

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Interesting ^^ It's rare that I enjoy something this short... the first few lines are just there and they're fine, but then the last line just catches you and sums it all up and makes this little poem all the way worth it. Very nicely done ^^

Moon's Poetess

Short, simple, to the point. I like that. It makes a good point too, lol

simple and straight to the point!

I guess it is true, now that I think about it. (Though there would still be snow.) Anyway, I like this. Nice little poem.

I've read several other of your works along with this one and I found your style to be lighthearted, funny, and cute. Not sure if that is what you want to hear, but that's just my opinion.

Nice job overall. Keep working on your rhyming and keep writing.

~Arafax~