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fatbird33 2009-07-15 . chapter 1
this is very true!
DeeFective 2009-05-18 . chapter 1
Prize For Review Marathon!

Well, I really enjoyed this piece. I liked how the rhyming was obvious but it didn't feel forced. Also, I liked the fact that this piece was short and sweet. If it had gone on for longer it would've been rambling and re-stating and sometimes that can work but not for this. Furthermore, the whole idea of the piece intrigued me. Why is it that we would die without the rain? There's the obvious answer that we can't live without water. And then there's the not so obvious one that's open to interpretation. Nicely done.
Kate Marshall 2009-05-15 . chapter 1
The third and last prize review by me, Review Squader, for the April Review Marathon. Congrats on second place!

Interesting word choice in this. It sounds very old-fashioned. Which I think is somewhat refreshing from the many rain-themed poems here at FP. It gives this a little more originality compared to everything else.

And your rhyme is cool. When I started reading, I didn't expect it to rhyme, so it was a nice touch. It helped the poem to feel more poetic. This /is/ so short, so I liked how, despite the small amount of words, you effectively made your point and still sounded very poetic.

-Peach/Kate
fleur de l'est 2009-05-01 . chapter 1
Seems informal, the the rhythm makes up for it. Perfect length, leaving a trail of thoughts =)
~fleur
Chasing Skylines 2009-04-26 . chapter 1
Oh, I liked this. The rhyming at the end was smooth and didn't feel inconsistent with the remainder of the piece.

I also liked the topic. It's a good thing to remember.

I do feel it could've been more poetic and stronger, but it's fine as it is; straightforward in its message.

- Review Marathon, link in profile.
FaithMemory 2009-04-26 . chapter 1
I love the 'die' and 'I' rhyme. I like this poem, yeah, and true I think. :) nice one!
your blind date 2009-02-11 . chapter 1
Back for dessert.

It's raining here, so this looked like a quick treat that fit my mood.

Punctuation - good. I could see this without any (more fluid in keeping with water) but overall I think the pauses add value.

It holds together with a clear rhyme/reason. I would however have liked it to be longer. Rain has so much imagery it felt a bit wasted.

*goes in search of more cookies*

B.D.
Isca 2008-07-05 . chapter 1
Short. Simple. Sweet.
'God is in the rain.'
Harmonic Discord 2008-06-01 . chapter 1
I love it! Sure, it's a bit short, but it's cute and clever. It's almost like a haiku in that you get straight to the point. It works. Nicely done!

And I agree. We need rain here. Our garden is doing terribly. :-\
simpleplan13 2008-05-24 . chapter 1
I liked this piece because the rhyming was nice, but not awkward like happens a lot in short pieces. I also like the message because it is so true. Nice job!

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Stardancere 2007-08-30 . chapter 1
Interesting ^^ It's rare that I enjoy something this short... the first few lines are just there and they're fine, but then the last line just catches you and sums it all up and makes this little poem all the way worth it. Very nicely done ^^

Moon's Poetess
Ammom 2007-08-18 . chapter 1
Short, simple, to the point. I like that. It makes a good point too, lol
psychedelia.melancholy 2007-07-12 . chapter 1
simple and straight to the point!
a silenced revolution 2007-07-05 . chapter 1
I guess it is true, now that I think about it. (Though there would still be snow.) Anyway, I like this. Nice little poem.
Arafax 2007-07-04 . chapter 1
I've read several other of your works along with this one and I found your style to be lighthearted, funny, and cute. Not sure if that is what you want to hear, but that's just my opinion.

Nice job overall. Keep working on your rhyming and keep writing.

~Arafax~
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