The violent imagery like "Whip" "Homicide" and "Crack" really help paint the grim picture of war.

The last lines really affect me

"Never ever did you see

Things aren't what they used to be"

Breaking up the rhyming couplets with "But" stops the poem from being too simplistic, it adds power to the meaning.

I love the rhyming!

Superb poem.

Twilight Starr

I love the scheme. The couplets are so simple, almost childish, but the rhythm changes at the end and demands attention for the ending, and then it's deadly serious. Good poem.

"Being treat unfair"-Should be 'treated' and not 'treat.' A great poem, though.