wow! I hope you haven't forgotten this story? I love it and can't wait for more. It's so cute, asnd Daniel's so naive. It'll be intresting to see what else he learns. Please please please finish it?!

Whee! Wow, the date scene was so cute. I love that Daniel was obviously about gay sex. I can't wait till their next date either! Looking forward to your next chapter :)

Can't wait for the next chapter! Esepcially when Dan finds out that Rubeen is a mafia! =D

ZL

This is really cool so far!

I have to say this is by far the most enjoyable story ive read.
i have one question, though: r u a guy writing from a guy's pov?
Either way, this is amusing. =)

Yay, date! It's funny, in this chapter, in the first scene Daniel was griping about how everything was so routine, and then immediately after that he was wishing everything would go back to normal. Fickle?

Anyway, great chapter! I love how Daniel is now talking to his snake (yeah, we've all been there and done that). Keeps it interesting. Anyway, update soon!

I enjoyed the snark humor.

Sure, it was a little draggy here and there, but proceed to continue.

ZL

I like this so far, it seems like a good idea, please continue.

I like it so far. My favorite character is Simon--he's awesome.

Um, let's see, there were a few tense errors, such as, "The goddamn alarm woke me up at quarter to six, when the sun hasn’t even risen and the city is just beginning to wake up." "Woke," is past tense while "hasn't," and "is," are present. But that's just knit-picky.

I guess my main criticism is about the whole pet-shopping part. It seemed to drag on for too long. You could have either shortened the scene, or used it to better characterize Daniel--like, make him have more of a reaction to the different pets, add some humor, whatnot.

Overall, though, I like it. I'm interested in this Rube character. Keep up the good work!