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| kdamu 2008-08-18 ch 14,  | abusethis was really cute and sweet and i loved it. it deserves so much more recognition. |
| Jazbkwm-unlucky-13 2008-07-15 ch 14, | abuseWicked-awesomeness! I love it, and it was very funny. |
| decadebydecade 2008-07-12 ch 2, | abusethis is just something i caught while i was reading and i thought you'd like to know because it makes it so much easier to edit if people point things out. *David replied angrily, turning away from me and stomping back towards where we had left Phoenix and Veronica. hope it helps :) |
| decadebydecade 2008-07-11 ch 14, | abusethat was undeniably one of the cutest stories ever. i LOVE it. |
| decadebydecade 2008-07-11 ch 12, | abusemore editing point outs: *We had the ugliest airport ever, it was all grayand for lack of a better word, dreary looking. nothing big (as usual). hope it helps :) |
| decadebydecade 2008-07-11 ch 9, | abuseso i hear you're editing. or were, at least. anywho, if you still are, i thought i'd help out a bit and point out some things i've caught. *“The problem isn’t so complicated, is it/” *But here I was, suck somewhere in the middle of the two, with no idea how David really felt about me. hope it helps. ps i love the story. |
| AbbeyEileen 2008-06-29 ch 1, | abuseIt's interesting so far. Remy is very likable, if a little immature at times... but I guess that's just from the lack of experience... |
| beingmyself 2008-06-27 ch 14, | abuseOkay, that ending was very cute, must say. |
| beingmyself 2008-06-27 ch 5, | abuseI'm surprised. I usually go for stories where the guy is more of a jerk and she changes him, etc, but I like yours :) One question though. Does she have friends or what? |
| beingmyself 2008-06-27 ch 1, | abuseI really like the last two sentences. Funny. David seems like a nice guy but I didn't really pick up on the inner sadness thing going on. You might want to show it more. |
| Euphorialie 2008-06-24 ch 14, | abuseAww, the ending was so PERFECT! I couldn't have imagined anything better or more adorable. David and Remy already have that old couple feel to them, like they'll be together forever, but they're still new and fresh. Wonderfully well done story. I tip my hat to you. :) |
| wordsflowing 2008-06-18 ch 14, | abuseaw. i really like this story. i started reading it like 3 hours ago and yeah its awesome. i love that it really made me laugh so much. i like that its actually realistic and that i can understand each of the characters. it reminds me of my life so much. i kind of agree that maybe you need to develop the characters more but over all it was really good. |
| BananaPhone 2008-06-17 ch 14, | abuseaww nice ending, but i still cant believe its over im gonna miss it :( but swell it was a good year of reading :) i hope to hear from you soon i loved every second of reading from you, be it the story or you very nice review replies Much love from this reviewer =] |
| violet-eyez 2008-06-15 ch 14, | abuseshort and sweet |
| Hidden but Seen by All 2008-06-14 ch 14, | abuseYAY! Amazing sorry it took me so long to read/review but my computer has been going wacky lately! PLEASE DON"T TAKE FOREVER TO UPDATE I NEED THIS STORY! |