well ain't this some heavy ** x) i liked this poem despite the butchiness and non-seriousness of it and the last line touched me so much that i've gotta quote: "u betch."

Honey, If you are going to post on here, please learn to type and spell properly so that people can actually understand what you are writing. I suggest maybe a spelling and keyboarding class?

I don't know if you are for real (and I don't think any possibilty is better than the other), but God that was hilarious. Do you know lolcats ? If not, you definitely should, because I'm pretty sure you were one of them in a former life. You might even be one in your current life -- a particularly angsty lolcat, that goes without saying.
If you are serious, I feel truly sorry for you. Go buy a dictionary and go back to school, mate. For your information, English is not MY native language, and even I write better than you (In my very humble opinion).
If you are a fake... well, I don't know whether to be impressed or mortified by amount of... stories you wrote. How could a sane person write 36 of this ?? I am sorry for the headaches that must cause you.

I am really struggling to stay polite now, so I think it's time to stop this review.

Au revoir !

(PS : ne te tue pas. Les vers en ferait une indigestion. I wrote this in French so I could vent AND spare your ego. I am so considerate)

lolness.

This is obviously a very serious piece of literature. FictionPress needs more masterpieces like this.

Hah this is SO priceless! The entire structure really flows, and adding your own personal style of presenting the words...AND LOL!! Personally, I like the user this 'poem' is directed to as a writer, but i still find this awesome! For anyone that keeps saying how horrible this is, I just have to say that it's really unfortunate that they can't accept and appreciate style.

Oh, and btw, don't 'kil urself'

I found the summary for this thing intriguing, for the fact that I happened to like Venustas iaceo as a writer. I expected to find... I don't know, an explanation, a parody of sorts, or feelings as to the supposed "flame" [which I have read, by the way, and deem it more a "constructive criticism" than a heartless flame].

Instead, I found trash.

Now, I don't want to come off as condescending, but it's a pity that you, as a seventeen-year-old American citizen, would have the gall to butcher the language that is supposedly a "mother tongue" to you. If language and spelling is not an issue [assuming that you have done this intentionally], I've read your other, er, 'poems', and I must say that they lack depth and emotion [and this, coming from someone who, as she said in her profile has gone through "many terrible things"]. I don't know if this particular piece was a witty attempt to use chatspeak, and I don't know if this was tongue-in-cheek poetry, but it definitely leaves much to be desired.

Fictionpress is an area to express creativity, yes, but a disregard for the language used is an insult in itself. I say this in the point-of-view of a sixteen-year-old who is [supposedly] a bit more moronic than you: I have, more than several times in my life, been insulted in chatspeak and its other derivatives, yet gone away unharmed simply because I knew better than to flame back and look stupid.

See, hate poems are not a real form of literature. The "hate" towards the other writer in this one is evidently seen, insofar as to call this person a "betch". This isn't poetry AT ALL; it's a tasteless attempt to get your, uh, "loyal fans" to counter-attack on the other writer. If that is your attempt, I suggest you take this down. It has been more than a year since this was written, and you've been given nothing but advice and/or complaints. I've read loads of parodies, but none so pathetic as this one.

IF THIS WAS INTENTIONAL [proof being your pen-name, spelled splendidly], then I apologize for overstepping my bounds in this review. Intentional or not, this piece is still not in my taste [but that's probably just me - and we all have our individual likes and dislikes].

I can only hope that you have enough brain cells to actually understand what I am saying - and I can also hope that you do not perceive this as a hate-letter or a flame. Literature [POETRY, ESPECIALLY] is a form of art. Please don't use the wrong paintbrush on a large canvas.

All the best, Olena Crimson

P.S. This should not, by any means, be a request for you to stop writing. If it comes off as such, then I apologize. Of course, I'd still encourage you to write - and for you to mature more as your writing progresses.

I found a way to understand this!! stand on your head and squint! so much easier to understand... I love parodies but this just doesn't do it for me...

First of all: is this a joke?
If it is quite frankly it's terrible, poorly written absolutely horrible to try and decipher.
Second of all: stop writing cause basically you can't write at all.

I'm not quite sure whether to believe you're serious or not. At first, I simply assumed that there was no way that anything written that badly could be anything but intentional. Your works are on par with mockeries of other works, and I’m sure you realize this. The greatest give away would have to be that your usage of terrible grammar, equally terrible (or quite possibly worse) spelling, chat speak, and the way you replace letters with numbers is simply too intentional. It’s too blatant to simply be accidental. I do actually know someone who writes almost as terribly as this, believe it or not. Her poetry is dark, dismal, and full of horrendous spelling and grammatical errors. Her meaning and purpose would be lost in the errors if not for the depressing and depressingly simple ideas they convey, again, much like your poetry. Her style is all but identical with yours, and would be if you didn’t have so many errors in things that no English speaker, native or no, shouldn’t be able to so. If this is a very, very drawn out joke, that would have to be your flaw.

Personally, and because I have more faith in the human race than some others, I think this is intentional in a very different way. Poetry isn’t simply for stating what your words are obviously saying, but for conveying a more subtle message. The use of chat speak, the terrible grammar, and the simplistic and stereotypical “messages”, as well as the author’s notes and other commentary… Are you using what many call the modern deterioration of our language to the computer age as an actual literary device?! If this was truly your intent, I have to say that I’d find it extremely clever. Of course your readers would fall into one of two categories: the ones who think you’re an idiot and the ones who think it’s a joke. You would have effectively outwitted your readers by using their bias against them!

Then again, I could always be the fool for believing you’re actually intelligent enough to understand what I’m even saying. You could always have been born with a serious mental defect, but by some ridiculous twist of fate have decided to express your stunted emotional growth online for everyone to see. Lord only knows why the person who changes your diaper thinks that being subject to such harsh mockery is good for someone with your kind of handicap, especially when considering that online no one can simply look at you and tell how severely retarded you are so they might hold back some of their harsh words.
This isn’t a flame, this is an observation. If you actually have a strong enough grasp to understand what I’ve written, then you are intelligent enough and have a good enough grasp on the English language that the errors you make are intentional. However, if you have someone who assists you to read these messages because you are incapable of reading anything harder than Our Town, this is really a criticism of them for being so irresponsible with a person as handicapped as yourself. I can’t say I’ll be looking forward for further installments, but I’ll have my fingers crossed for this all being an extremely clever use of chat speak.

lol ChEmo (Chav Emo) writing yay ^_^
I'm guessing this is a real person, I don't think anyone would be bothered enough to actually go through all this for a fake account... Actually, I would, hooray for me.
I guess it's not that hard, writing like a chav and emo at the same time. All you need to do is write bad and talk about how bad life is at the same time.
In the poem you wrote stuff like "I'm dying for your touch" sounds like you're in love with Ven... ven.. damn, I forgot the name.
I talk too much.
I should shut up now...
Oh wait
Since you claim to be bad at spelling, how come your name "Damned Soul of Chaos" is spelt well then?
But I love your summary "Please flame them for me" Hehe ^_^ that's so cute I love you
-adds to fave authors-

Um...I'm not sure whether this thing was meant to be a joke or not. And...well, I didn't really care to find out, so I read the reviews instead. Those were entertaining enough on their own that I at least feel this wasn't a complete waste of time.
So, reviewers: Well Done!!
Author: Better Luck Next Time!

FP needs writers who are more like you ;)

hopefully this is only a parody...but after looking at your account and all the other stuff...i'm slightly scared and confused. from all the other reviews this seems like a joke account but i have trouble believing that anyone would go to such lengths to make one.

For your sake, I hope this is a parody. After checking out your profile and all, it's a bit confusing; who would go to such lengths for a joke account?
Anyways, if it is a parody...Wow. Brilliant. You fooled us all. I hate all the angsty crap on fictionpress, and this summed up quite a lot of the horrid poems on this website nicely.
If this isn't a parody...Well. Let's just pray it is, hmm?
-kon