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| La. 2008-07-16 ch 16, anon. | abuseWoo! Casey has a cameo!! :) I love your story, as always. This was a very interesting chapter. I like how you're adding spiritual significance and complexity to Charity's character. I'm a bit impatient to start the next chapter, so I'll leave it at this. Thanks for sharing your wonderful stories with us!! |
| Casey Drake 2008-07-12 ch 17, anon. | abuseBwee!! *applause* awesome! i know it's not the end... but... BWEE!! It's good. :D CD |
| key of A major 2008-04-05 ch 15,  | abuseloving every moment of it, this is really good reading and writing |
| Casey Drake 2007-12-26 ch 15, | abuseI caught that when the buddhists went by. I enjoyed that reference. *nod* I like this story. It's hard to define why. But this... *shrug* It means something. And it's written to mean something to a lot of people. And different somethings to different people. I don't know. I don't make sense. :) CD |
| La. 2007-12-26 ch 15, anon. | abuseI love this story, and I love the Good Samaritan reference at the end; ESPECIALLY how you connected it to modern events. Very good job subtly directing people toward a more positive view of those who are often portrayed as villains. |
| Casey Drake 2007-12-10 ch 14, | abuseHA! They will get him. :) CD |
| Casey Drake 2007-09-24 ch 13, | abuse...oh... *is speechless from the rockingness* just... wow... :) CD |
| SapphireIris 2007-09-15 ch 13, | abuseAnd hence the title! Well, one of the reasons I can see for it, and probably the most obvious. Hm... the one thing I'd comment on is the space between chapters. The transitions are too abrupt for me. Other than that, keep writing! -SapphireIris |
| La. 2007-09-12 ch 12, anon. | abuse*Is emotional.* For someone as eternally-steady and calm as I, that state is very rarely reached. VERY, VERY powerful chapter. I wish Kris hadn't died. :( Thank you for the love between Sandi and Charity. For some reason, that's very important to me. It says so much. (Keep writing. I will buy your books.) - A loyal reader, if not a loyal reviewer, - La. |
| Casey Drake 2007-08-27 ch 11, | abuse...he's a ghost, then? Forever repeating himself? -looks around for someone to hug- :) CD |
| SapphireIris 2007-08-17 ch 11, | abuseOoh... interesting twist, there. What about the rest of the people at the school... Taran, for instance? Would they remember him? I'm hooked, and I have an insatiable appetite for updates. -cough- :) No real constructive criticisms for this chapter. It was pretty good. -SapphireIris |
| SapphireIris 2007-08-13 ch 10, | abuseThat was sad. Yes, I'm capt. state-the-obvious, but you did an emotionally charged chapter and you did it well. There was one part near the end of this that was a bit confusing due to all of the imagery. I know it isn't over yet, at least. Keep on going, willya? :) -SapphireIris |
| Casey Drake 2007-07-25 ch 10, | abuse...There is peace there, but often the peace comes too early to those who might have brightened the world a touch more had they held on. CD |
| SapphireIris 2007-07-21 ch 9, | abuseWow, it's been a long time since I've reviewed your stuff O.o I like this one :) It's got a few more issues in it, and the new characters are cool without being overbearing. I think you should bring the others back in in awhile, so they have a little bit bigger part. I can't come up with any good constructive criticism this late (it's nearly ten in my adjusted time zone), so I'll leave a nicer review next chapter. ((promises while holding hands of an elf)) -SapphireIris |
| Casey Drake 2007-07-17 ch 8, | abuse*hug* If I could take the pain of the world... I always try... and then I hear these stories and I feel bad because I can't -do- anything. :( CD |