You have great ideas and I liked this poem a ton! But, again. You need to work on spelling/grammar. As authors, we must realize that we can not se internet speech or slang. This like that lower the quality of our work. Still, a good poem when you get past the slang!

so sad...sorry. i liked it though. i like how you put the words together. i wish i could do that. :)

You know... at first I read your poem and thought "OH MY GOD" because your spelling is atrocious. At the same time, I think it must take a lot of time to figure out a way to mispell all these words. You did it on purpose, and you always do. Why?

Great poem, very emotional...the spelling was a bit confusig, but, other than that, it was good.

once i demolished this, with correct spelling, grammer, and other things, i actually makes some sort of sense.

and perhaps people would stop flaming you if you didn't write like this ... it kind of puts the rest of us to shame.

to me, it's as if you are mocking everything.

At first I thought you were stupid as hell to even write like this, but after thinking this over, I have a nagging suspicion that you're writing this way on purpose. Why do I think this?
Well, your friend, hey maria, reviews your poems the way you write it, while her poems are in proper english. But if I'm just pulling this out of thin air and you're just dumb, then well...its going to be a very hard life for you in the future.

I'm sure it would be better, if all the spelling was correct. Otherwise I think it threw me off and personally I couldn't concentrate on it, the spelling frustrated me.