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Reviews For: As It Falls

C.Sabbadin 2007-06-19 ch 1,	abuseMY only suggestion is, if you decide to repost this or edit it that you should break that huge paragraph into three or even four smaller ones. This was an incredible subject; it was unusual and refreshing. THe details were interesting and the narrator was well protraited. It's just the giant paragraph that threw me off.
Sacha Lynn 2007-06-15 ch 1,	abuseDude. I love this. I read a story kind of like it once, but it was about a little boy and a church... It was actually on FP, but it's disappeared since. It was probably my favourite story ever on FP. I think if my edits are too much (which is fine, I don't expect you to take all of my suggestions!), at least my paragraphing should work better for you ;] So much in one paragraph, especially the first one, scares people, lol.
The Dutchman 2007-06-15 ch 1, anon.	abuseThis Is My Favorite Story So Far, So Dark...I Like It. I'm Curious How Far Below The Naval He Went. I'm Pretty Sure I Have An Idea, And All I Can Say Is...Damn...That's Gotta Hurt...I Mean...I Know Your Sadistic But...Damn...Anyway Well Done. I Really Liked It.