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| devil-Chrno55 2008-07-01 ch 7,  | abuseI like this story the characters are all really interesting, i will admit it was a little choppy in some areas but since you say you're redoing it im sure it will come out even better than the first time.^_^ |
| Silveralsa 2008-04-16 ch 2, | abuseHm, interesting. And I like the Japanese flavor with his name and her dress :D (Then again, with my story's asian influence, that's a duh, lol... wait, that is Japanese right?!) |
| xxkarinxx 2008-03-27 ch 6, anon. | abuseOMIGOD! What a creep!! So evil... +_+ P.S. I'm so sorry I didn't review/read this chapter sooner, I've been focusing on games & schoolwork. Sorry TT^TT But your story is getting more interesting! xD |
| Twilight Starr 2008-02-13 ch 6, | abuseInteresting addition. The fighting was interesting. Have a nice day. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| Silveralsa 2008-02-07 ch 1, | abuseHey, great to be able to read some of your stuff, sorry it's taken me so long! I love reading other people's fantasy stories :D One thing, in the opening dream paragraph, would it work to do new paragraphs for when each new person says their line? I found it a little confusing, though not much. Just my opinion :) Great job! |
| shounenlove 2008-02-01 ch 5, anon. | abusei loved how Tillie just killed that giant imp!! it must've took a lot of time! i would've been scared if i was her, just from everything that's happened!! oh man, that guy is back!! who is he anyway? well, whoever he is, i wish he'd just leave Tillie and Kiyoshi alone already!! hope u hurry with the next chap! |
| shounenlove 2008-02-01 ch 4, anon. | abusewow!! Kiyoshi had to fight that spider all on his own and he did it!! And Tike's cool!! i never knew he was that smart!! guess he'll be a good help!! i wonder what Tillie's gonna do!! |
| xxkarinxx 2008-01-15 ch 5, | abuseThat was WONDERFUL! xDD But what a cliff-hanger. TT^TT Please update soon! xD And so sorry I didn't review earlier, I had tons of things to do. But I still love your story! xD I like your details too. xD |
| Twilight Starr 2008-01-05 ch 5, | abuseAh, imps. I like that she trips so much. It's hilarious. Nice work. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| Twilight Starr 2008-01-05 ch 4, | abuseOoh. Spiders. I don't care for spiders, but I guess they're better than flesh eating bats. Kiyoshi is cool. I would to see Tillie kick some butt. I bet she will later on in the story. Nice work. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| Twilight Starr 2008-01-05 ch 3, | abuseI liked seeing their thoughts. Ooh. Flesh eating bats. *cringes* I would be running and screaming. Nice work. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| Twilight Starr 2008-01-04 ch 2, | abuseGood chapter. The symbols are very interesting. Nice work. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| Twilight Starr 2008-01-04 ch 1, | abuseInteresting beginning. I like the story title. The chapter title is intriguing. Nice work. Good luck with writing, this story, and life. Have an excellent day. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| xxkarinxx 2007-11-03 ch 4, anon. | abuseo this is like magical knights rayearth! cool! xDD plz update soon! |
| xxkarinxx 2007-09-29 ch 3, | abuseOH!! That's so brilliant! XDD Tike is so smart. xDD |