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| skooshiegirl 2008-05-27 ch 3,  | abuseThis is a great idea for a story, and I am enjoying it so far. Though, the chapters are a bit short for my taste. |
| Ashley Hyperkins 2008-03-03 ch 3, | abusethis is a great idea, and I understand that it is just the beginning, but I think that you need to flesh out the characters more and give them different personalities. YOU REALLY NEED TO UPDATE! |
| Ellkay 2007-07-26 ch 2, | abuseThis is actually really brilliant! Please update as soon as you get a chance. Seriously loving this story. |
| Dreamless-Wonder 2007-07-03 ch 2, | abuseCute story. Definitelt worth reading! Please update soon. I can't wait to see what happens next! Love your pen name by the way! -Kelly |
| Ashley Hyperkins 2007-06-22 ch 1, | abuseI want more!! This is so good! I really didn't like when she was telling the directors she wouldn't let them down and all that, but that might have just been me. If I were you I would put either more detail in about how rare callback are or talk more about how big this musical is to make those lines make more sense. I really like where this is heading, but you should write more so that I can not be totally bored this summer! Great job! |
| madeyes61 2007-06-15 ch 1, | abuseGreat story so far. I can't wait for the next chapter! |
| ryansheart 2007-06-15 ch 1, | abuseIt was alright. Some grammatical errors in some places. Especially in the first paragraph, which were extremely noticeable. Due to the fact when I read the first sentence I was puzzled by what it was supposed to mean. But after a few short seconds, I realised a lot of the commas were missing, making it sound confusing. The first chapter was very captivating. It didnt exactly catch my attention. Though it was a good. Just a suggestion. Maybe shorten your title, it's a bit lengthy. Hope to hear more! Isabella.x |