I liked the rhyming, it wasn't forced and eased the flows of the lines. This is brilliant! Great peice!

Sometimes hope just sinks. Excellent poem.

Twilight Starr

I liked that! It can be taking as a serious poem or a funny poem actually, which I think is cool. That takes skill! Very good job!

-Shu Fang

Great poem, yet again, but in line four, there should be an "s" on the end of "shrinks", and in the 6th line up from the bottom, either pick "my" or "a", don't use both. Good job, keep it up!

Gemma

i think too much

this is a poem that is good.

Yay it rhymes!

I like the whole thinking and shrinking thing.

The last stanza is making me think, about why hope is gradually sinking.

Good job!