I felt like I missed something when this started, like there was a large chunk of time between the last part and this final part, and a lot of important things must have happened.

However, once I got into it, and got over that nagging feeling, I enjoyed it.

On the technical end, there was one sentence that bothered me for what seems like missing words. "much less the mastermind who orchestrated the are merely a", an instance of left over BBcode for italics that shouldn't be there [word was illustrious] and one word right at the beginning [innermost] that was used as a noun when it shouldn't have been. That's it for errors and mishaps.

The ending was cool, but didn't feel like an ending to an on-going series. It was a great short story ending, and it wouldn't have bugged me in a stand alone or a mid-section story, but as an end to an over-arching tale, it lacked in closure for the characters.

That said, here's some over-all commentary on the series:

For the most part I enjoyed it. First, third and fourth parts were great. Second part felt lacking in substance. A re-write for the first would help it immensely, fixing errors, and making it feel more like the latter parts. If you decided to fix up the series as a whole, linking the parts a little better would do it some good. Add a little more to the beginning and end of each story that will cause it to be a little more coherent as an over-all product.


Once again, thanks for writing such an entertaining story, and I hope to read some more stuff in the future.

This is Gabe, signing off.

Now, THIS I liked. Methinks it would make an excellent Anime, and I suggest you send a screenplay of it in to Manga as soon as possible. Of course, they'd probably simply steal your idea and take all the credit.

However, despite my admiration for this series, I must also express a feeling of deepest confusion. It's - forgive me - written extraordinarily strangely, and whilst it seems to make sense, I appear to be missing that one little silver strand that links all the layers together. I shall have to peruse this.

Be that as it may however, this was a brilliant series, and I greatly enjoyed reading it. Well done.

Hahahaahaa ... I love the ending.

Umm. A little more proofreading would have been nice, there were some errors in phrasing and awkwardly used pronouns.

I didn't really get the bit with the ringing in Tim's ears. Other than that, it was all finely written and I enjoyed it immensely. Tim really seems to have descended into a veritable pit of insanity, even more than previously. I must ask -- is there more? :D