wonderful but oh-so-creepy :)

huh? wth happened to neal? is he really crazy or is he like being controlled by aliens or something? oh yeah really good btw

Poor Jane. He must have changed quickly. At least she's discovered some backbone. If you were intending creepy, you achieved it.
I have to ask, though you probably won't answer. Who are they and what was Neal making with ornge peels and a glass bottle? What's the black stuff and what made the huge hole?
What would Jane have done if she wasn't pregnant?

I liked this very much. It was totally neat and original. Nice.