You know I liked this. (Big Surprise there right) I find it very easy to relate to what you write. I love your style, you make things simple, but the way you do it you invoke very complex emotions.

Mel/ilike2eatbabies

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Heyya!

It's me again, and hopefully this time my whole review will show up. Lol. =D

> Letting go is hard to do

But I can’t just wait around for you. <

Okay, these two lines confuse me because to me, they contradict each other.

Doesn't letting go kind of mean that you have that person? It's just that you need to be away from him?

And then the next line...I just can't wait around for you. When I read that, I understand it as the person doesn't have that special someone and she can't keep hoping anymore that that person will be hers.

Hehe. Do you get what I mean? :D
So yeah, they contradic each other. :D

Moving on...

> I’m not willing to be a ping-pong ball

Letting you go back and forth <

Okay, your poem has a serious tone to it, so when I came across the word 'pingpong', it's like some bell inside me started to ring and screw my brains out. Why? Because the word 'pingpong', in my personal opinion, is out of place in this poem. You tried to use figurative language, specifically a metaphor, which I commend and applaud you for, but it just didn't seem to fit in your poem, to me anyways, and we all have our personal opinions. Hehe :P

> This time, I’m gone for good,

And I’m not looking back. <

I really like these two lines because they they struck me when I read them. You used colloquial words yet you still pulled it off, the ending was dramatic, serious, emotional and suspenseful. And that's a really, really great job! :p

Keep up the great work, and I can't wait to read more of your works! :P

Heyy! It's me again! Hehe :D

> Letting go is hard to do

But I can’t just wait around for you. > I’m not willing to be a ping-pong ball

Letting you go back and forth > This time, I’m gone for good,

And I’m not looking back.

At the last two verses, I got this mental image of someone literally walking out the door as though they were done. Sweet ending.

Loved it,definately one many can relate too.

Okay. This is truly wonderful, and relatable. my favorite is the part where you say you can't even be friends, because "let's still be friends" is all too often a lie, becuase you don't stay friends or a stretch of the truth because you still end up loving that other person. Good job, and I really liked the title of this, "I can't". It was really good.!
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The title needs a little bit more work.

But things in this poem are visual with the ping-pong ball... but you end it there. Could there be more visual references?

Keep up the good work.

I really enjoyed the last two lines of this poem. I think they were very touching and the perfect place to end the poem. I'm not sure if the 11th line fits. You had already used 'last time', I think that it might be too close to it to use it again.

-Sarah

its good to not look back. but sometimes it comes subconsciously anyways. good poem, well expressed emotions

keep writing