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| yuki yami-sama 2008-01-31 ch 1,  | abuseIt was a beautiful poem. I sensed the irony in the lines: For our pain, so agonizing So raw, yet real Our pain we felt The feeling like this So gone, yet none. I love the feeling of simple innocence and... I like the rain too! |
| alice is dying 2008-01-28 ch 1, | abuseWonderful work, the both of you! I escpecially liked- "It's like a salvation gift, washing away all the pain, Of previous days, of previous years." But to be honest, the whole thing was good. Remember to watch out for tiny slips that could throw off the whole feel of the poem. For instance, I got very hung up over the line that says, "Why we banish are fears of are own agony?" because the second "are" should undoubtable be "our". Just a reminder. This piece, and all your work really, is good, and it's a shame that something so insignificant should throw it all off balance. |
| Sly87 2007-08-23 ch 1, | abuseYou two wrote very well together. Nice job on a powerfull poem. ^_^ |
| darks00 2007-08-19 ch 1, | abuseWow I love how you and xxBlackchaosxx wrote this poem. Very deep, very good! xxDarkness' Kidxx |
| PocoSnow15 2007-06-22 ch 1, | abuseOh wow! I love how your two styles went together! I love the rain, and the first verse is so true. "Washing away all the pain". And the last verse "So agonizing, so raw, yet real." Amazing line. You two should write together more often, this was really good! |
| XxBlackChaosxX 2007-06-21 ch 1, | abuseur peom is awesome i have 2 go find xxblackchaosxx... XD. Yea, that was fun and yea, I'd like to do it again sometime. Email! |