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| xxopticaldelusions 2008-03-06 ch 1,  | abusei love this, particularly the last line. keep writing! |
| simpleplan13 2007-09-21 ch 1, | abuseI like this.. the title is awesome and the descriptions are beautiful |
| painting andromeda 2007-08-28 ch 1, | abuseI like this, it hit something inexplicable. |
| Lucid Nonsense 2007-08-03 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful. "How eternal the childhood inside your hands" In those seven lines you managed to say so much. |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2007-08-03 ch 1, | abuseThe length of the lines lends to the magic of your message; very nice. :) |
| wordsworth in a garbage can 2007-07-11 ch 1, | abuseA/N: it's about a hippie girl with long hair like soft waves and eyes blue like the sea... I am glad you included that in your notes because I think that led me to a better more real understanding of the poem. Between the poem itself, the gorgeous poem and the title- I think you are some kind of genius. |
| synapse collapse 2007-07-04 ch 1, | abuseThis is so so so so amazing. Especially the last line, it really wraps it all up. Ah, you have beautiful imagery. (: |
| Kissing Concrete 2007-06-29 ch 1, | abusei LOVE the last line!! refering to your author's note, i really can picture the "hippie girl" and how beautiful she and her aura are. i can imagine her having not a care in the world, and she is truely consentrated on being her own person. i respect her. *favorites list* |
| ancient trees 2007-06-29 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful! I like the lines about 'childhood inside your hands' and difinitely 'lost validity through sun-struck skin.' They ring so prettily. |
| Aquafied 2007-06-26 ch 1, | abusei think my head fell off when i saw you had posted something beautiful hippies died years ago and only last in green fields and san fransisco |
| Tytherpol 2007-06-25 ch 1, | abuseit's good. |
| cocaine and cherries 2007-06-24 ch 1, | abusei like. it flows so well, and for such simple, elegant words, it really packs a punch. |
| no.peace.los.angeles 2007-06-23 ch 1, | abuseHow beautiful. The author's note really made the piece come alive to me, especially mentioning how blue her eyes are. And ooh, I was just looking at the title of this again and I really love that. Fantastic job. Keep writing! :) |
| Her Wishing Well 2007-06-21 ch 1, | abuseI loved this - the beautiful imagery and the authors not all adds character to the poem. |
| recycle rhymes 2007-06-21 ch 1, | abusethat's pretty. i really like the flow of this one. "how eternal the childhood inside your hands" - that's a stunning image. nice work. |