i love this, particularly the last line. keep writing!

I like this.. the title is awesome and the descriptions are beautiful

I like this, it hit something inexplicable.

Beautiful. "How eternal the childhood inside your hands" In those seven lines you managed to say so much.

The length of the lines lends to the magic of your message; very nice. :)

A/N: it's about a hippie girl with long hair like soft waves and eyes blue like the sea... I am glad you included that in your notes because I think that led me to a better more real understanding of the poem. Between the poem itself, the gorgeous poem and the title- I think you are some kind of genius.

This is so so so so amazing. Especially the last line, it really wraps it all up. Ah, you have beautiful imagery. (:

i LOVE the last line!! refering to your author's note, i really can picture the "hippie girl" and how beautiful she and her aura are. i can imagine her having not a care in the world, and she is truely consentrated on being her own person. i respect her. *favorites list*

Beautiful! I like the lines about 'childhood inside your hands' and difinitely 'lost validity through sun-struck skin.' They ring so prettily.

i think my head fell off when i saw you had posted something


beautiful hippies died years ago
and only last in green fields and san fransisco

it's good.

i like. it flows so well, and for such simple, elegant words, it really packs a punch.

How beautiful. The author's note really made the piece come alive to me, especially mentioning how blue her eyes are. And ooh, I was just looking at the title of this again and I really love that. Fantastic job. Keep writing! :)

I loved this - the beautiful imagery and the authors not all adds character to the poem.

that's pretty. i really like the flow of this one. "how eternal the childhood inside your hands" - that's a stunning image. nice work.