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PancakesAndCoffee 2008-03-06 . chapter 1
i love this, particularly the last line. keep writing!
simpleplan13 2007-09-21 . chapter 1
I like this.. the title is awesome and the descriptions are beautiful
painting andromeda 2007-08-28 . chapter 1
I like this, it hit something inexplicable.
Lucid Nonsense 2007-08-03 . chapter 1
Beautiful. "How eternal the childhood inside your hands" In those seven lines you managed to say so much.
Nobody-n-Particular 2007-08-03 . chapter 1
The length of the lines lends to the magic of your message; very nice. :)
wordsworth in a garbage can 2007-07-11 . chapter 1
A/N: it's about a hippie girl with long hair like soft waves and eyes blue like the sea... I am glad you included that in your notes because I think that led me to a better more real understanding of the poem. Between the poem itself, the gorgeous poem and the title- I think you are some kind of genius.
synapse collapse 2007-07-04 . chapter 1
This is so so so so amazing. Especially the last line, it really wraps it all up. Ah, you have beautiful imagery. (:
Kissing Concrete 2007-06-29 . chapter 1
i LOVE the last line!! refering to your author's note, i really can picture the "hippie girl" and how beautiful she and her aura are. i can imagine her having not a care in the world, and she is truely consentrated on being her own person. i respect her. *favorites list*
evm 2007-06-29 . chapter 1
Beautiful! I like the lines about 'childhood inside your hands' and difinitely 'lost validity through sun-struck skin.' They ring so prettily.
Aquafied 2007-06-26 . chapter 1
i think my head fell off when i saw you had posted something


beautiful hippies died years ago
and only last in green fields and san fransisco
Tytherpol 2007-06-25 . chapter 1
it's good.
i'll ask the stars above 2007-06-24 . chapter 1
i like. it flows so well, and for such simple, elegant words, it really packs a punch.
no.peace.los.angeles 2007-06-23 . chapter 1
How beautiful. The author's note really made the piece come alive to me, especially mentioning how blue her eyes are. And ooh, I was just looking at the title of this again and I really love that. Fantastic job. Keep writing! :)
Her Wishing Well 2007-06-21 . chapter 1
I loved this - the beautiful imagery and the authors not all adds character to the poem.
recycle rhymes 2007-06-21 . chapter 1
that's pretty. i really like the flow of this one. "how eternal the childhood inside your hands" - that's a stunning image. nice work.
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