Ooh, nice. This story needs no sequel; the ending is perfectly executed and worded. Very nice.

Keep writing!

This is freaking brilliant.

I suppose you could say that what you've said about my poems applies to your short stories, except I much prefer reading your stories.

Keep it up, my friend.

How morbid. The first words that came to my mind when I read this was 'mafia'. Though short it invokes emotion. I really like your writing style and how all the sensory images come out. Great job.


Surreal

I definately like the end of this story. Excellent juxtaposition between the church and the don. I love it. Overall an excellent story.
One question: do you think that the meaning would be stronger if you told the entire story from Paglacci's p.o.v? As in, first make it sound like he's killing for the purpose of honor and then add the twist at the end? I don't know. I really like how it switches p.o.v. I just wonder how the effect would change if it was told all by the Paglacci. Anyway. Great story!

oh. sad.

i love how you described his feelings all the way through his death. its made it ten times more real. for a second there, i couldnt breath with him.

this is great.
liz

This is a very good short story. I must be honest in saying that you really have a talent for this sort of thing. It is your ability to write so fluently and well that keeps on bringing me back to reading your works. The only criticism I have, regarding this piece, is that you use Francesco's name a little to often. Maybe replace the continual use of the name with 'he' or something like that. Sorry if that sounded harsh, the name just seemed a little repetitive to me. Truth be told, the way you end the story is in such an excellent manner that you could very well do a follow up chapter. You leave the reader in suspense, hanging on your every word and then finish with a cliff hanger. Another interesting thing I noted, is the mention of Jesus being the savior. A very clever bit of writing which, not only gives the reader an idea of the person looking at the image of Jesus that many know so well, but that you also show that any who need hope in their lives (that have read this story) need only look towards Jesus and his heavenly Father to know that there is still hope for them. Well written! Keep it up! Hope this review made sense, and again, sorry if the criticism was overly harsh.

Cheers
Lost in A World of Pain

Wow,
I half-by expect a sequel to this piece, it's brilliantly intriguing.
You have kept a good steady flow thoughout the piece, and such clear imagery easily captivated my imagination.
Keep up the good work :)

Whoa! I think you need to write some huge thriller book like this. You are very good at adding twists in thriller and murder stories. Keep it up!

Sincerely,
Emma Noble