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| bzchilakalak 2008-01-09 ch 1,  | abusei like it. your character has an interesting outlook on this an an obvious attitude about him. i also like how you descrive the idea of a vampire. good stuff. |
| mate.feed.kill.repeat 2007-07-08 ch 1, | abuseInteresting, to say the least. You have a unique and convincing writing style. It started well, and ended well. The word choice was excellent for the character. Nice work. -STIX- |
| Ghost in the Dark 2007-06-26 ch 1, | abuseThat was... pretty damn cool. Nice morbid humor, some messed up psychology, and an ending that made me smile. I do wonder what people will think when they find the dug up grave and puked out organs, probably puke their own out... - Ghost |
| Scared-stiff- 2007-06-25 ch 1, | abusegood story |
| Darla P 2007-06-24 ch 1, | abuseWow this one was interesting, really liked it! |
| C.Sabbadin 2007-06-22 ch 1, | abuseInteresting. You had this vampire/zombie/monster/psychotic man thing going on. The narrator had some funny dark humor. I especially enjoyed the Grateful Dead part. "Never eat a mushroom pizza." Others wish this had lasted longer but I think this was an appropriate length for this idea. |
| Shockbox 2007-06-21 ch 1, | abuse(whistles) I wish this was continued, because THAT was awesome. Nothing beats the 'ol fashioned zombie bit. ^_^ Although, I do feel a tad bad for Billy. Great work! |
| MercX 2007-06-21 ch 1, | abuseweirdd. But... cool nonetheless. It's quite an interesting short story, and I like the ending a lot. The only thing that got me was that the writing seemed a bit jumpy in spots, like it could use some filler detail to flow a little more. But you get lots of coolness points for it. Good job! |
| Honestcat 2007-06-21 ch 1, | abuseGod. That was amazing. There was just something about it that had a mysterious, horrific air to it. And let me tell you, I really despise vampire stories. I loved how the whole picture wasn't shown right away. The story seemed to flash and travel in a way that a true physiological should. An art I have yet to master. There isn't much I would change. Once again, I'm really not big on vampires. I really just didn't feel right with that sort of thing. I must say, the title really turned me away. It just seemed clichéd to me. It just strikes me as a title of a second-rate Anne Rice wannabe story. And really this story is anything but. |