Reviews for Underneath Xial - FictionPress.com

Tawny Owl 2008-07-03 ch 1,	This definitely feels like there should be more to it. I liked the set up at the beginning, it seemed quite epic, and I loved the idea of having fairies in armour. Lilith says ok a lot though, and I didn’t think that really went with the style of the rest of it, or the fact that she was in charge of an army. There were some really good ideas in here though. Did spot one typo: looked down out of reflexes – should just be reflex.
Grayson Briar 2008-05-15 ch 1,	Interesting. I liked the imagery near the start, and the dialoge was both military-formal and fantasy-spiritual, an interesting mix. I like the cliffhanger ending, showing the expanse of what they'd have to fight, and the vague hopefulness of fighting back against the dead hordes. But still, I think continuing on with it couldn't hurt at all.
Koki Enwai 2007-06-21 ch 1,	This is nice for a one-shot. If you want to continue, it's your choice. Some of the names sound Chinese. Your prose is excellent; your description is balanced, and you've got a good story to tell. Well done, man.