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| deuteriuM Xtreme 2008-04-27 ch 1,  | abuseI like this. (: The tampon premise is hilarious, and at the same time all the mixture of emotions is realistic - kind of melancholy, somewhat hopeful but never over the top. I also thought initially that the ending was going to be sad, but you left it open-ended without an obvious happy ending. And it's nice that way. ^^ |
| Kaerith 2008-04-21 ch 1, | abuseThis utterly reeks of real life, and it's fabulous! No stretch of imagination required or suspension of belief to accept some stupid plot premise; this could actually happen. The first encounter was great; not a silly "love at first sight" moment, just some vague interest with little acknowledgment of it. And their discovery of each other didn't immediately lead to sex and lifelong pair-bonding--just some hot making out which is quite justifiable because they are both horny teenage guys. I also *love* the optimistic ending. |
| blackberrydream 2008-04-06 ch 1, | abuseAw, too cute! A romance that starts over tampons, gotta love it! |
| gossipgalmishi 2008-04-05 ch 1, | abuseoh nice! Jane is either a biatch or a bimbo on puberty |
| Imagined Insanity 2008-03-02 ch 1, | abusegah loved it. makes me want to send my brother out for tampons... hmm. |
| nomy 2008-01-06 ch 1, | abusei enjoyed it!! its so cute and funny the way they met..and i thought atleast the Brandon guy like really in love with Lyle but its all bullshit isnt it..there goes another point to hate bi guys..but not all are such a jerk as Brandon mind you.. its was entertaining and really kinda stupid Lyle decision to reject the offer from Jarred..fortunately Jarred is like totally like or love (maybe?) Lyle..the ending kinda cute with the story starts with the buying of tampon and it ends with the buying of tampons also..so cute and kinda suitable in the story...great job!!^_~ |
| Pearlita 2007-09-05 ch 1, | abuseCute! I really liked it! |
| Amindaya 2007-07-18 ch 1, | abuseHaha, OMG I loved it. That was just beautiful. It has the feel of a soap opera because of all of the coincidences, but it was still so believable. I just loved it. :D |
| firestar267 2007-07-03 ch 1, | abusehehe loved it :) just very well done |
| Lady Psychic 2007-07-03 ch 1, | abuseWow! This is a great story! I loved the tampon thing. It was hilarious! |
| magalina 2007-07-02 ch 1, | abuseAw! That was really sweet! Jarred was adorable. I gotta read more of your stuff :D |
| Lai Anderson 2007-07-02 ch 1, | abusewow. this is good. serendipity it is. hehe, nice job! |
| hoshi-chan590 2007-06-23 ch 1, | abusethis is really good! i liked it, the whole 'love-in-unexpected-ways'. the way you made the connections between every person of importance in the story was amazing, almost masterful its very complete: love, drama, action & humor and a great title nice job! |
| Kailum 2007-06-22 ch 1, | abuseHaha I loved the tampon thing. It was gold =P And how the extra-large ones hurt when they're taken out... talk about too much information =P That was hilarious. It was really cute as well! He had enough courage at the end to try! XP So cutee... Haha you know, this makes them brothers-in-law now XD And I love the name Lyle! I dunno, it just sounds really cool! |
| Shizuka no Namida 2007-06-22 ch 1, | abuseI like Carrie's protectiveness, and the fact that Jarred smashed his fist against Brandon's nose. I was hoping Carrie would make an apearance just to add her own injurues. I was also hoping she would slap Jane, the little slut. Even if she didn't know Brandon had a boyfriend, she should have left him when she found out he did. I like this one-shot, it's really good. |