This story was marvelously portrayed thanks to your intricate descriptions and well-organized storytelling. Your descriptions were solid and didn't feel repetitive, something that just seems to feel right at the right time.

The twin narrative was heartfelt without feeling melodramatic. You did a great job with this from beginning to end.

Have you showed your brother this? I'm so sorry your friendship disintegrated. I hope you'll come together again one day.

Overall, not my favorite. I think it was written well, and the emotion is definitely there. But when it turns from a narration into an explanation, something is lost. Maybe if you show, rather than tell, this will improve.