this poem is a confusion of beauty and violence...

"I want to suck bullets from between your teeth" - has a threat to it like a charge... everything is electric


"(the pieces look like rainbow fireflies
and slam into the ground like beer bottles, shattering and ricocheting off our legs)" - the brackets work, like an after-thought... it sparks, again.

I really like your writing; 'the spin' is also beautifully meloncholic. lovely stuff!

Wow, again. I like the way you repeat the idea of violence and a world ending type theme. 'the sky falls down' 'armageddon. An amazing and powerfull poem.

i like the poem.

I like the way the first line is continued with the second-to-last.

And I love the last line, it's a perfect summary of the feelings in this poem.

these are all the things i would like to say but i get cottonmouth when i think of them. this is perfect.

wow, great poem. The imagery and words used are awesome and make the poem so. . . wow lol. I especially love the last line, just because it ties it all together very nicely. Keep it up!
Faith

amazing.
all of your work is so intense.
the way you write brings your readers in,
hook, line, and sinker.

"i want to suck bullets from between your teeth", paired with the not-quite-ending, "i bite down on the bullets between your teeth, they spark", is **-worthy all on its own. my other favorite line being, "my jeans are too thick." god, i'm glad you're writing again.