i love it ^^ lol i can't wait to see what will happen! *bookmarks page*

Thank you for the story and hope you would write more. I like Aria and Malik. Plus, I have your story as one of my favorites.

Hi! This review is for Chapter 3 so that you can write more for Chapter 4. I like the twist and the tension between Aria and Malik. Hope you can update and write more. Thank you!

I like your story! please update. Thank you!

I love it. :D

oh ym gosh i love ur story withe the wizard! It's great i havent read a story like this in a long time! Keep up the good work.
peace Rachel

keep goin por favor omg u should become an author

update asap!

well well well, anywhoo i really like this, i cant wait to read more. hurry up

Very interesting plot. I can't wait for there to be more! More details would be nice; imagery. Continue soon!

Your story is coming along very nicely. It will be fun to see how Malik deals with Leena coming along. She seems to be a hitch in his plans. ^_^ Be sure to personally look over the text before submitting it in the future. I found a couple of minor grammatical errors, but that's just a matter of checking over your paper. Try to leave it alone for at least 24 hours before checking it, so that it's fresh and new to your mind (if you don't do this already). It's really helpful. Anyway, I can't wait for more! ^_^

i really like this one. It seems well written and it looks as though you already have a sense of direction for it. Update soon

This chapter is much improved even over you last one, which wasn't so shabby. Try to be descriptive, but be careful that you don't bog us down with too many details. My only two suggestions are; 1. Don't add too many more characters. Leena seems like an interesting character, but too many characters in a romance can detract from a story line.
2. Keep Malik feral. Its what makes him smexy!

Keep writing! 'Nes

hm...

maybe aria is disappointed that malik isn't hitting on her??
haha

I like you writting style, it's very victorian age-ish
lets see your strengths in chapter 3 were:

1. good flow ( meaning its not dragging on and no awkward phrasing)
2. same writting style ( you keep in the 'victorian' style and don't switch
3. your grammer is good but not great

I think you need to work on:
1. Describe everything (not to be too vague, i mean descibe the character's actions, interactions more and the scenery around her and her personal thoughts)

adding on to number two i think that you descibe what the people are doing in the village and don't really describe buildings, the grass, the pond off the the side, etc. as much so add in a few descriptions of her 'enviroment'

Do you get what i mean? if not just email me at

so yeah, if you be a little more descriptive your story will be golden! Good Luck
-sara

im intrigued as to what the wizards plan will be

update again pleasums