haha you're right, it has a definite empty tone,
but the imagery in the first stanza is incredible.
-ty.

Brilliant, definately not sucking. The first line really draws u in, and all in all the poem is amazing.

Although I don't like your recent poems as much as your old ones, they aren't as bad as you seem to think they are. In this poem, my favorite line is the first one because it sounds so forceful. However, the first stanza seems to conflict with the rest of the poem because you add imagery that isn't present in the rest of the poem. Maybe you could add more imagery in the rest of the poem.

Wow. Amazing work.

"Slice my skin, just so I can feel the words
dripping gracefully through my flesh." - These two lines struck a chord with me. I just love the way you've described it.

The last line is genius.

~Shadowed Mind x