I like the POV! I love this tale, and I've never seen a version told by anyone but the match girl herself. This is refreshing and original and awesome! Very creative of you.
I noticed a huge number of typos, though. I understand that it's acceptable to not include any capitalization in a poem, but this only worsens the unprofessional-ness of having almost every other sentence contain a misspelled word! It's hard to follow a poem with so many errors, and I think that this is one poem that SHOULD be followed.
--Yna, from the Review Marathon (see the link in my profile!)