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| Professional Dreamer 2007-10-15 ch 3,  | abuseYou write so well. Your pace, your choice of words, your characterisation...the only gripe I have is some of the backstory you gave in this chapter could have been dealt with a little more subtly, but this is a mild niggle, and nothing in the face of the story and the emotion you've woven. |
| Nate 2007-06-30 ch 3, anon. | abusenot much to say i loved the first two chapters but this one is not that good, you need more details, after all the devil is in the details, the other chapter's had emotion and atmosphere this one is missing both of those elements remember little fairy "Atmosphere is the all-important thing, for the final criterion of authenticity is not the dovetailing of plot" |
| mortediamore 2007-06-26 ch 3, | abusei like this, it's different. |
| springfiry 2007-06-26 ch 3, | abuseSad sad story ... But i hope Astrid finds someone to take care of her also.. Poor her...she suffers alone |
| she smolders 2007-06-25 ch 2, | abuseI can't wait to read more of this story, it's quite intriguing so far. And I can't help but feel bad for the boy too. |
| Poena Sensus 2007-06-25 ch 2, | abusewhat a **, damn i feel sorry for that boy oh damn. now i know how clare felt in 6ix bullets poor hopeless loosers, i want more what happens next and why must she leave? |
| Poena Sensus 2007-06-24 ch 1, | abuseI am back with more ambiguous reviews, but I feel redundant writing “good job” over and over again” but I liked the ending it was not something that I saw coming. Kind of a reverse of the cliché. See ya latter little fairy ….and I am going to |
| Ardently loved 2007-06-24 ch 1, | abuseVery interesting, hmm, I'd like to see what happens next. |