this was beautiful, I am just a little confused when you say 'brother'

Incest ?
This was great, so sad though .
But I can relate, other then the incest lol ;D .

...That was so confusing...
Incest? I'm guessing...please correct me if I'm wrong...that's the way I read it...
It made me tear up...

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The incest definitely made it memorable.

Good job. :)

I was a big confused by Jack being her brother, because earlier she remarked "He had the clearest blue eyes I had ever seen. They were what pulled me to him in the first place." To me, that suggested that she was intruiged by his eyes the first time she met him. =/

woah dude. that's pretty cool. is this real life story? or what?

This short was really nice. I liked the distant emotions that you put in it and the realism that you had. Another nice thing about this one shot is that nobody would be able to guess that Jack is her brother. From the beginning of it it sounded like he was a boyfriend or something else, but it actually sounds a lot nicer to find out that it's her brother.

Awesome.

C.S.

I truly enjoyed this (which is a rather rare occasion that occurs on fictionpress). Overall the prose was well written. The thoughts of the main character, who seems to have put her own life on hold waiting for Jack, is very realistic. I had a boyfriend go over to Afghanistan for 9 months and I am almost positive it was the hardest thing we have ever been through. There really is that true feeling of dread every time the door bell rings or you see a strange car pulls into the driveway. I however was shocked that Jack turned out to be her brother. It was a very well written plot twist, but it almost feels as if it comes out of no where. It makes me want to ask the question: are her parents aware of her relationship with him? I mean obviously from the writing they seem to know that she is worried about him, but do they feel like its just sisterly worrying or do they know it’s a deeper affection. The same thing goes for her friends. Anyways good one-shot.
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so shes inlove with her brother?

lovelyjustlovely
i really like it
& i think the incest thing just made better
(but maybe thats just me) :)

This is so sad, once you get past the whole incest thing. I like the line that says "I could taste sorrow and remorse." Also, i like how, she drops the letter and walks away then says, "I couldn't run away from the truth anymore." great irony. :)

Wow. THAT was unexpected. And wonderfully done. Everything kind of stopped when I read the last sentence, it threw me completely off. Great, great job.
Both my brother and my boyfriend have gone to (and are still in) Iraq, so ignoring the whole incest thing, I could kind of relate.

this is incest right?
anyway i loved this story nice job ;)
i don't understand why so many people are again incest
but whatever
nice job

INCEST?

omg. this grosses me out.

but nevertheless, you write really well. :D couldn't stop reading :P

still, taboo scares me :))

thats so sad. but a good one shot.