Wow. That's vair vair good. Can't wait to see what happens next.
: )

Hi Cynthia. It's me, Matthew. I read the first chapter, and let me tell you, I had no idea it was going to be this dark. I've been anticipating this story ever since you told me about it last year, and I can't wait to read it in its entirety. Hopefully your writers block will go away and your story can really take off!

One thing you can improve is possibly make the prologue a little longer. Perhaps give the reader a bit more hints of the story to come before they really start. Just my opinion. Do what you want to make it the best story you can write!