|Reviews for On the Way to Ever After: Ivy and Miguel Tell All|
| Here In My Mind 9/10/11 . chapter 8
I really love this story! It's so interesting and unique. I found it on the SKOW website under best chemistry and at the time I was searching for a story I could read that would keep my interest and wouldn't be some completely cliché' bunch of regurgitated word doo doo and what do you know after going through all the other stories I finally found it. And at the best time too.
Gosh it's really depressing to spend hours scoring through fictionpress for interesting stories only to be disappointed time and time again at some of the inferior selections (gosh I'm so snooty) they have on here, but your story came at just the right time for me because I was seriously gonna be like “F it I’m never reading another story on this site again!” You really deserve more reviews for this.
The formatting of this story is the only thing I had trouble with at first. With the whole interview thing I was worried that there wouldn’t be enough details to engage the reader into actually getting into the story but I guess it kinda smoothly transitions into a well informed flashback/interview/storytelling thing and well whatever it’s called it’s working so far.
Well, enough of my ranting back to reading for me.
Oh and I also like how we get the POV from Miguel and Ivy but you don’t waste time going over the same scene and details incessantly and take into account that the readers don’t want to read the same thing over and over again twice in a row like repetitively through a whole story that’s like 30 freaking chapters long (like some other people do…gosh morons…sorry that was a rant).
| There's-A-Star-In-My-Hand 9/8/11 . chapter 15
that was possibly the crulest cliffhanger ever! ! ! !
i absolutley adore Migs!
this story isamazing
please update soon!
| 72898 9/7/11 . chapter 16
Yay!, hopefully it won't take you another six months to finish the next chapter... I wonder what happens next...
| 72898 7/25/11 . chapter 15
please please update, this story is amazing! i can't wait to see what happens next.
| A reviewer 7/16/11 . chapter 15
I can't BELIEVE this story doesn't have more reviews. You are a brilliant writer with a very bright future-I can tell. However, I am also angry at you, because I went to push the "Next" button, and there wasn't another chapter! I need to know yesterday what happens with this story. But take your time-I've seen the wonderful work you put out there, even if it takes forever!
| Canaletto 5/22/11 . chapter 15
I just found this this morning. Then read the whole thing in one sitting. Going by the premise, this story shouldn’t work, but your characterizations are just so damn good, that it does. I honestly have nothing but praise for this story. It makes for a very welcome change from the more standard romance stories that run rampant across the site, and having just finished this, I’m amazed at the cohesiveness of your plot given the long time you’ve been working on this. Your hard work clearly shows, and it’s obvious that you’ve been continuously tightening the script as time has passed. That you still consider this the first draft makes it obvious the high standard you write to. I feel somewhat sheepish that I can’t give any constructive criticism on your piece, but honestly, this is a brilliant body of work, and can’t think of anything that might make it better.
| Alanisaur 4/30/11 . chapter 15
| JoeyAnna 4/23/11 . chapter 15
Okay, I'm gonna go with the truth here and say I thought this story was going to be pretty weird with the difference of age and him only being 13, but the way you set it up made it non-creepy if that makes sense? Anyway, I really liked it. I can't wait for the next chapters to appear.
| qwertyuiop 4/5/11 . chapter 15
WAH YOU UPDATED, I couldn't believe my eyes, I had kinda given up. But it's a really nice chapter! And IT ENDS WITH A CLIFFIE! AH. I love Miguel's point of view, and it's good there's some development now, he's finally beginning to realize that she might actually like him and not know it herself. Plus the kis. I really wanna read the next chapter now, so please don't make it a year :(
OH HI Wiseau Films
Clearly you haven't read it, since if you had, you'd realize it has nothing to do with pedophilia at all. And if you have read it and still think so you just haven't understood the story.
haha phew, sorry, I had to get that out of my system. Such a meanie! Don't let it discourage you!
| choc me 3/26/11 . chapter 12
"And in the darkness of my mind, another door slammed shut, another floor felt cold and wet underneath me, the uneven tiles chafing my skin, the smell of puke sharp and sour but strangely welcome, my thighs still streaked with blood and vomit, still burning, burning—"
I don't even remember reading abt that part, and I was so shocked! Ok so here's my thought on it: julio used her "adoration" (she mentions that word somewhere) and fear of him, to manipulate Ivy into sleep with him...right? Originally I thought that it might have been an appropriate relationship but not necessarily involving sex..but the 'blood on thighs' part kinda overruled that. And it turned out to be a really, really unbelievably, vomit-inducing, disgusting experience, and Ivy realised what a perverted, twisted, manipulative, incestuous pedophile her uncle was...That's what I think happened at least..
If ur wondering what I'm doing up (it's pretty late right now) and re-reading a story i've read a couple times already, well...I needed comfort, something to get my mind off certain things..like Ivy said, to keep me sane. And honestly, ur story was the only one I thought of that could do that..Miguel is so...I don't know how to do him justice..but thinking that someone can be so amazingly self-less, honorable and pure actually gives me hope and comfort.
I think that this chapter, especially the last bit, is my favourite. The bond between Miguel and Ivy is beautiful and goes beyond simple attraction. I especially loved the part where she's thinking : "At that moment, it was entirely conceivable that my life was his to do as he pleased." I'd forgotten how incredibly amazing u can be with words. I also loved her silent "I've missed you" - I felt like I could actually feel her pain and yearning for have no idea how much I'd like to have my own Miguel right now..It feels like no matter what he'll always be able to keep her safe. I can't even care that he's only thirteen anymore.
Anyway, enough of my ramblings...On a brighter note, I finally managed to twist up my hair with a chopstick! (and make it stay up) :)
| choc me 3/18/11 . chapter 15
Just listened to 'hands clean' - well yeah ur right it's almost perfect! I've fav'd it already on youtube. Alanis morissette seems to fit Ivy really well. There are just a few words here and there that seem out of place for the story, like "And you've washed your hands clean of this"... "I wish I could tell the world cuz you're such a pretty thing when you're done up properly.
I might want to marry you one day if you watch that weight and keep your firm body" or "if it weren't for me you would have never amounted too much" - Doesn't seem to be like the things Ivy would ever say or think.
As for that one crummy review u got, it's not even from a sane person really! Have u read his stories or poems or whatever they're supposed to be?
Take care and big bear hug!
p.s: the depth in your story and characters just blows me away
p.p.s: how on earth do u hold up your hair with chopsticks? It keeps falling out after a few seconds! I've started collecting hair chopsticks
| choc me 3/18/11 . chapter 1
(sigh) My long long -long - review got cut off again :( I had so much to say! But I really dont feel like writing it all again (sob)
| choc me 3/18/11 . chapter 8
Hi again! So yeah I wanted to finish my review (I have no idea why fp keeps on cutting my reviews!)
First I read wiseau films' review ... I just checked out his profile and stories, well I don't feel like bashing the poor thing anymore.. Just check it out and have a good laugh! I'm actually kinda worried abt this guy...umm just check it out and u'll understand what i mean.
So on to the actual review, it was an awesome chapter as usual! The tension and suspense was great! I kept hoping they'd finally confess or something but thought it wouldnt happen. But it did! And now I have to know what happens next! But at the same time I don't...cause I feel like it's drawing to an end and I so do not want this story to end u know? I just want it to go on and on - the characters are so endearing!
I felt really bad for Miguel, cause he was anticipating for a great day with Ivy and instead he just got hurt over n over, and dragged in the mud Pft I can't believe that black sugar rat-faced thing ! He's got nothing on Miguel! (My fav new name for a guy now!)So in a way I'm glad Ivy was affected too..Although that lil china doll girl is unbelievable! She was totally coming onto miguel even though she thought he was with Ivy (But serves Ivy right for treating migs so badly)
I still love Ivy though - Just not as much as I love Miguel I TOTALLY want my own Migs by the way - nothing less will do now ! (Well thx to u lady! _
| choc me 3/17/11 . chapter 12
Hey! I'm totally mad at FP! I just wrote a long long review pouring out my lil heart and fp totally truncated it! there's just a lil bit left _
I'm too disheartened to write it again right now, so i'll do it later on..cause there are things I really wanted to say!
| choc me 3/17/11 . chapter 15
Hey ya! I'm so so happy u updated! I decided to put off my work just to read this chapter! I Just couldnt wait!
This chapter was DEFINITELY worth the long wait, but - BUT could u be anymore cruel than to leave it like that? :P I almost screamed in frustration when I reached the end! I was waiting the whole time for them to kiss or confess their feelings! And when it finally happens...BAM!U have to end it like that! _