I fell in love with Rivera the first sentence you even introduced him to us. And then, of course... here you go taking away this beautiful new character the first chance you get. My poor baby. ):

May I reserve the right to knife the person who killed Rivera in the face, please?

Ew, and I hate people who go around saying racist things. I don't like Sam one bit. I bet it was him!



But anyway, another amazing chapter. Beautifully written and everything! You're really not getting the attention you deserve for this... at least you aren't review-wise.

It absolutely repulses me why nobody else has left a review for this. 'Cause it really is interesting. What time period is this set in, by the way?

As long as your updates come fast then the word count doesn't even matter. (:

I'm curious about more of the details of why Henry hates his father. Do we find out more about this next update? I sure hope so. I also want to find more about Jessie. I'm oh so very curious.

I would say that this story is one of the the most flowing and beautiful pieces of writing I've read on FP; especially in chapter one. Your chapter one was so very catchy, and it made me jealous because I don't think I could ever catch my readers attention like that. Haha.

My only problem is that I find that the chapters are super-short. But if having short chapters means that you'll be updating very frequently, then there's nothing wrong with that. (:

Keep writing, I need to know how this living situation works out !