heehee i love it you gotta keep going please :)

oh whats in the loaf or what ever it is i want to know hehe its realy good has good potential keep going ok

Great story so far! Keep it up! :D

M... continue, hun. xD

Interesting...bring flowers. I like your MC and love your writing style!

UPDATE SOON!

That was quite amusing. The first part was confusing though, because we don't know who the girl was, or if it was a dream, or what happened. Also I don't think you should have your character refer to the chapters:

"If you didn't notice from the previous chapter, I work in a bakery named "Pan de Panda"."

Unless this is some sort of diary, it sounds weird. Most characters aren't supposed to think they are in a book or story. But other than that it was pretty good. Keep working at it. :]

Ashelin

Hm, interesting. Good for a first chapter. It would be cool to see more of this.