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by His blood 2007-09-13 . chapter 1
underoath, ** yes. awesome band. & what a beautiful song, i have it on my ipod.

i'm listening to 'the last night' right now.

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i would die a thousand times over to have your faith.
i don't know where mine is,
but i think it's dead and bleeding and screaming somewhere
and i don't think i'll ever get it back.
Tytherpol 2007-08-14 . chapter 1
i like it.
this has such a detached tone, where the reader can just feel the emptiness between the letters. the spaces you've filled are both pitifully heart-wrenching, and they just sort of... linger?
haha whatever it is, it's nice.
i think the parentheses are effective in this piece, but the repetition is sort of - redundant.
it's still very good. you've got my respects.
yours, -ty.
The Jynx of Kari 2007-07-01 . chapter 1
Wow. This is some harmony of words you have. Both to explain your broken state and the slightest bit of hope Jesus has presented you. It's graphic in the sullen tense of what you do and the longing to accepting of what He offers you. Wonderfully done i may say.

__Kari
i am kelsey 2007-06-27 . chapter 1
underoath. nice touch.
narniaXisXhome 2007-06-26 . chapter 1
WOW. THIS IS SO AWESOME! i started crying just like i cry every time i watch The Passion of the Christ. FINALLY SOMETHING ABOUT JESUS! TY 4 posting this I luv it so much!
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