 by His blood 2007-09-13 . chapter 1underoath, ** yes. awesome band. & what a beautiful song, i have it on my ipod.
i'm listening to 'the last night' right now.
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i would die a thousand times over to have your faith.
i don't know where mine is,
but i think it's dead and bleeding and screaming somewhere
and i don't think i'll ever get it back. |
 Tytherpol 2007-08-14 . chapter 1i like it.
this has such a detached tone, where the reader can just feel the emptiness between the letters. the spaces you've filled are both pitifully heart-wrenching, and they just sort of... linger?
haha whatever it is, it's nice.
i think the parentheses are effective in this piece, but the repetition is sort of - redundant.
it's still very good. you've got my respects.
yours, -ty. |