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My Heart Belongs to You 2007-07-15 ch 3,	abuseIts good, really, maybe a little more description would make it better.
Elegant Raven 2007-06-27 ch 3,	abuse"Hunching if a stench of life disturbed me," I think hunching is the wrong word to use, and you keep changing tenses. It's a confusing. I have to go back and reread it in a certain tense. I particular like the vampire's view in this small series. I also think "sip" is the wrong word for the vampire. They don't sip from humans. I think maybe the word "dine" or something of that sort would have fit better.
Elegant Raven 2007-06-27 ch 2,	abuse"Below the frantic surroundings", what about the surroundings? This particular one in my opinion was better than your last, but the ending doesn't quite flow with the rest of the poem.
Elegant Raven 2007-06-27 ch 1,	abuseOk, it's a very nice concept and idea, but you need to work on your grammar and spelling. In your author's note it should be who's instead of whose. Ambiance is sound, a music of sorts, not a tangible object and sound can't really glow. I think this has a lot of potential and I'd like to see this edited and lengthened.