Interesting poem. The senses were good, and there was a strong sense of pattern and structure. The last line didn't quite fit, as if from another poem or story, but it gives you something to think about.

This was such a cool set up, it's like a description of what embarrassment is.

lol, very creative. Oh yea, I like the last line btw.

Nah, I don't really like the last line either. The rest of the poem was good though. Great job.