Very sweet, something about it is just appealing. Well written, thanks for the read.

All due respect,
Faerie Energy

AH! It's got potential, and you're getting so close! But you didn't make it over the line! Ah! Sorry. I could see those few rhymes and I could almost imagine it, but there just wasn't enough there! Sorry again, I just wanted to see this go farther when it was so close :[

I need to give you this little bit of info.
An elipsis, three consecutive periods in a row (...), should only be used if a statement is leading up to something OR if the entire audience knows what the next word is. If you want to enhance a sentence and make it stretch out, you use two hyphens. --. That means the sentence is exaggerated.

Ok, I like this concept and because I see this everyday; especially while I was in highschool!

I think this has a twist though. It's more of a fantasy than the ordinary school girl oggling the bad boy or the popular jock.

Ok, on to normal critisism. Once you start rhyming, you need to continue to. Otherwise the whole poem loses a certain rhythm. Try to think of a certain rhyme scheme and that will really help with the process. And work on enhancing your vocabulary.