Yo this is sick. I have one problem with it. It practically about emo kids wich ** me off. Its great writing but emo kids cut themselves cause they think they the only ones with problems and that ** me off. again, great writing, not my thing though.


-Twilight Wolf


ps. missed me didnt ya! lol

Listen, I don't mean to be offensive and if I am, I'm a bastard, but it seems to me that you are undergoing a bit of a goth type phase of writing. I mean I don't mind it and I think it's beautiful in it's own way, it's just... well maybe I'm tired of reading my peers work and seeing the same words in every poem. Unfortunately, it just sounds too gothy, I'm sorry, but it does. However the part about blood and tears and the whole concept of hurting yourself hurts others is ingenious. Sometimes, my stuff sounds gothy or weird too. But who said gothy was a bad thing? Keep at it, I enjoy your work (two reviews in a day I must be on a roll).

this is really good. very simple, but it hits the nail right on the head. the rhyme scheme is easily followable, and it just flows really well. i really enjoyed it!

Yeah, it does hurt the people around you but it's so ** releasing. Dude. I didn' know you liked Akon. I love that one song. What's it called? Locked Up? Hehe. Anyhow, this was a good poem. Hm.. Yes. Your poetry is constantly improving. *Thumbs up*

"Can't you take it out/And turn it into tears"

usually when tears aren't enough, blood is always there to be shed.

ah
gid damn emos