You last updated in 2011 and gave up on such a funny story? :O FINISH IT!

Hey! This story cannot be over now. update it soon! I'll be waiting very eagerly!

your way of writing is really good and your descriptions are good too! This is one good suspense story I'm reading on Fictionpress. I never get any good ones!

So once again, you are good. and you have to update real fast.

This has got better and better :D Action, comedy, a little hint of romance. Awesome! Keep up the great work!

Awesome chapter, lots of action and a tiny glimpse towards what's going on. I love the 'Stay away from the Manticores and stay away from Varderen'.

Kayla has ridiculous amounts of nerve giving the pair of them cheek like that! I love it.

Cheers so much for continuing to write this, please keep on keeping on!

I don't know how you do it but I love Gray as well as Varderen now...

I like how there's humour to every chapter. I was also half expecting officer stanley to make an appearance when the police car came. Heck, I was almost disappointed when he didn't, lol.

I'm glad the storyline is building. Can't wait for more. ;)

Yet again another great chapter. The plot is getting more and more interesting, I realllly want to know whats going on! I loved the whole 'screamed like crazy' part, it reminded me of when I hid in my closet to scare my brother! Loll! (I was about 11 at the time!)

Update soon! I really love this!

Jess xxx

Dude, cliffhanger!

This is definitely one of those stories where you don't stop to consider the realism of the situation, because it's just so darn entertaining, and because you're so caught up in it all. I'm not sure how Kayla has managed to keep her curiousity to such a minimum, though. I would be sitting Bobby down at the first opportunity and demanding to know what on earth was going on!

Can't wait to see what happens next, so hopefully you can keep this updating streak going!

I love this chapter. The whole 'suburban danger' thing is so interesting as it's both safe and yet more scary because most things are so normal. I was so sure something was going to happen when she was outside shaking the dust off the air mattress and it just made it more tense when it didn't. I love the end too, with Bobby saying 'it's not Bailey'. I'm so excited you're back writing this story and updating so much!

OMG I NEED TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS.

I LOVE VARDEREN BUT I NEED TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS NEXT KJQKJWRLGE.

I absolutely ADORE your writing style, and this plot is refreshingly original; I never know what's going to happen next.

Please, update as soon as you can. (:

Have a good day!

Love,

Clash. (:

Dude, that was evil. Awesome chapter. I can't wait to see whats going to happen next. You definitely created suspense. I love it. ;)

Another great chapter! Sorry I can't give you a longer review just major busy! Had to give myself time to read this though, it's just that good! update soon!

Jess xxx

what kind of trouble is he in?

Yay! Oh my God, it's so good to have this story back! I missed it. I love the entourage of characters you create and how they drop in and out so seamlessly. Robin is hilarious, as is Bobby's reaction to her. And I loved Kayla always indicating even while she's trying to get away.

Bobby's really grown on me, him and Kayla have a nice relationship even if it's based on her being in charge of a sex pervert.

I'm so glad a whole bunch of chapters have come out at once, I really hope you continue and finish this. Who is the original biker (the one whose bike she trashed)? What is Bailey's secret? What illegal activities is Bobby involved in? So many intriguing questions, I can't wait for them to be answered.

I sooo hope its Varderen. ;) Bobby cracks me up every time he appears. He's just one of those characters. Neil made me grin too. Its like he's anticipating trouble from Kayla.

Heh, good ending. I'm really starting to like Bobby. I loved his 'Shall I break in?' part. He's hilarious. I hope nothing bad has happened to Bailey! Great chapter!

Jess x