this is lovely.
i love how you talk about colors attached to emotions and images.
i can't honestly say that i understand it all. i think i'll have to read it again.

What are you talking about? This poem is pretty spiffy! (that's a good thing)

Another in my favorites.^_^

-Ramen

damn. it's nice to see some good poetry on this site again. again, damn.

it's so--i'm not sure of the right words so i'll go with--personal feeling. like you're telling us (even if it's imaginary) a little too much about you that it leaves the reader (me, at least) a little uncomfortable.
it paints the absolute greatest picture, though.
i love how you talk us through it. i thought the tone and reasoning were perfect. and humorous almost at times.
it's different.
i'll give you that.
but i had almost a whole week when i wrote nothing but poems like this. so it's not completely far-fetched.
dialouge and parentheses were used appropriately--at just the right times but not over-used, and i like the way this was broken up.
i don't like the title. but seriously titles are i think everyone's weak-point. i know they're definitely mine. i probably spend just as long making up a title as i do actually writing the piece. :/
anyway nice job even if you don't rlly like it.
-ty.

Powerful, poignantly simple and image-rich. A gem of a piece. Bravo!

abby

this is interesting.