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| kloun doll 2008-05-30 ch 1,  | abusesometimes people say things without thinking too much, and it's a big mistake. |
| Evera19 2008-04-12 ch 1, | abuseWow, that was deep. I liked this I'm not sure why though probably because it put emotions into me, Hanging from the ceiling, sad. |
| XsilentXescapeX 2008-03-27 ch 1, | abusehmm i can sense myself either adding something to my favorites or adding you to my favorites... ~silent |
| Captain Lucky 2008-03-17 ch 1, | abuseI really like the way you presented this. It was extremely sad, but I think you did really well at presenting the idea of someone who's been hurt inside, somewhat permanently, but feels the need to hide it. It really kind of gets you right here (*pounds fist over heart*) =) CL |
| Lynn's Love 2008-02-24 ch 1, | abuseOkay. I'll have to admit at first I was a little confused. I had to go back to the first stanza and re-read it. Then I understood the rest of it. I think this is truly a personal favorite. The way that the broken up sentences intensify the pain you are describing is unexplainable. This honestly brought back some painful experiences, and the entire time a single name ran through my head. Excellent job. |
| anonymous 2008-02-24 ch 1, anon. | abuseI think that this poem has a wide range of emotion. The images created in one's head will stay for eternity. What happened is tragic. It has changed my family's world also. I know things will never be the same. But hopefully they can only get better. Keep on writing. |
| Nemonus 2008-02-03 ch 1, | abuseSo true. how one inadvertant thing can hurt. Good descriptions here. Beginning almost in the middle of a sentence gave a nice impression of real life. This may be personal choice, but I tend to like my poems with periods at the end--it sortof wraps them up, encloses them. I'm sorry about Don... |
| ode to a nightingale 2008-01-27 ch 1, | abuseThis is so true... Very nice. |
| B.S. Ha 2007-12-13 ch 1, | abuseI like how you begin in the middle of something ("and then..."), because it shows how unexpected that word can be... Good job ~BSHa |
| Gothic Spook 2007-11-16 ch 1, | abuseI can completely relate to this at the moment. During a class lesson we were handing a poem and when I read it a memory which I had forgotten came crashing to me and put me down for days after, trying to push it back under at the moment. I love the last stanza, I think thats the most powerful one as it sums up the poem brilliantly. |
| QueenVixta 2007-08-26 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful piece again. Very well written, as always. I'm sorry for your loss. [Vix] |
| Indigo-Andie 2007-08-22 ch 1, | abusei don't know if it's because i lived through a similar experience or you're writing says it, but i didn't need the A/N to make it clear what you were talking about. good writing, like the way you circle back to the beginning. sorry about the experience though. |
| Shinyfighter 2007-07-31 ch 1, | abuseJeez I come back from my dry spell and I see you still have incredible writing skills. I'm sorry for your uncle's b-friend and I hope your family can come through. |
| Needa S 2007-07-24 ch 1, | abuseVery sad! The images are vivid. Great job putting this together. Sorry for your loss. |
| Her Wishing Well 2007-07-15 ch 1, | abuseThis was so sad. I wanna say something like sorry for your loss: but that doesn't sum it up really does it? a person isn't like a pair of keys that you can just loose...This was a great poem though. |