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Kiejay 2007-07-13 . chapter 1
The Title was a sort of "give away". However, the story was well crafted enough to leave the reader wondering at teh end -- was the conversation her memeory from the distant past or just a few moments ago? I liked the way you pulled the reader in. But the change from "he" to "she" in paragraph 11 ("Yeah, yeah") was disconcerting. Was this intentional or a typo? If intentional -- Why? Ihad to reread teh passage a few times to see if I had interperted it correctly. When I ascertained that I had, it made no real sense to me to switch view points like that at that place in the story line.
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