wow, this is really good. the writing is solid and the concept is interesting.

i found the paragraphs to be a bit long to read on a computer screen (nothing you can really help, but just for future reference).

the beginning was a little slow - perhaps a bit less detail in the punishment of the villian, but otherwise, you got your point across. the end was touching, and i didn't see anything that needed to be changed. great job!

-Lefty

Very nice work!
A potent political statement, pointing out the traditional quandary, that one man's terrorist is another man's freedom fighter.
Perhaps a little exaggerrated- as surely more than two would realise that something was wrong(?) yet still a faithful account, with a solid style to back it up.
Awesome work;)
Erisah

i like this story a lot. i hope you do a next chapter of me. thanks a lot. you gave me a new idea for a story. good job in writing the story. it was great

It's an interesting story, with a very sad and intriguing ending. Honestly, I have no idea what you mean by "heroes" and "villains", though it does create a sort of image in my head of a society that labels its people from birth and enjoys chasing villains for all eternity. Strange image, I know, but since I have no other ideas as to what you mean, I'll go on thinking that.

There were some parts that were kind of dull, namely the beginning, but by the end there were some lines that were just so inccredibly touching that it didn't even matter anymore. Overall, I liked this story. Good job.