this is beautiful. i love the last stanza - it was almost funny.
keep on writing.

Kinda sounds like a poem I wrote about me. I don't look the way I feel. That sorta thing.

-Ramen

beautiful, as always. (:

This is interesting. Though not my favorite style (the numerous parentheses, the "l.o.v.e." stuck in the middle, the many descriptions that sort of feel like they're based off of the same thing...), it's not bad. The thing is, you HAVE emotion. You also have beauty, nice words, and descriptions. The flow is a little choppy at times, but for the most part it is good as well. What is it that bothers me? Perhaps that the emotion doesn't feel quite original. This is generally considered an "original" style, but every single time I've read it, it comes off as the same as the others. It gave me the impression of someone who's taking everything and thrusting it all in one poem and snatching someone else's idea. Now, I highly doubt that this is the case. This is only my first impression upon reading it.

Honestly, I just don't like it. I'm not really sure I like the first little stanza's claim and I don't really like how the vivid descriptions and lines don't really mean anything to me. It's not a bad poem, but it's not one that speaks to me. It's not one I can relate to and sympathize with. Technically speaking, if you count the all lowercases as style (something I hate), it's perfectly fine. There are nice words, emotion, feeling... everything you need. It just doesn't quite click with me. Just one person's opinion.