creepy... very nice!

nicely planned, nicely executed, and nicely done mate ;)

I wont be able to go to sleep anymore! How do you do it? You scared the bleep out of me!

i'm shivering. and its not from the cold. u are a wonderful writer. that story really...creeped me out. like a horror story should right? im serious, you should publish a book with lots of stories like these.

Very good concept, my friend! I enjoyed reading this story. You have a distinct writing style and I see great potential in you!
Having said this, there are some problems with the story. There are quite a few of grammatical anf typographical errors, you might want to double check your speelling before submitting a document, but other than that it was fine. The story was good, and it was believable. It was like hearing a witness form one of those paranormal TV shows.
All in all, I look forward to reading more of your stories.

Excellent story. I would really like it if you wrote more like this.

do you read poe? this story seems very influenced by poe, its very creepy without resorting to gore or violence. also very reminiscent of king. kudos, moonslight

This is very good! Very very good!

The man’s expression gradually loosened as he placed the key on the desk out in front of him.

"loosened?" Do you mean fell or softened?

The part about red eyes was creepy- I liked it.

I've read this one as a much shorter urban legend. Great job fleshing it out!

Very nice story!

Fun concept and good execution, too. Could use a little polish, but otherwise it made for a very nice read. Kudos on the chilling end!

I'm new to FictionPress, and I was just looking for something to read. I came across this, and it's very wonderful. I enjoyed it, very creative and fresh, and it's unlike anything I've read before. Props to the author.

The version where her eyes were -gone- is much -much- scarier. And that same version has the guy looking through the peephole and only seeing red... because she's staring back at him. :)

That was much different than what I expected, but unusual endings are always the best. This is one taht I'll remember for a long time. Excellent work!

Wow, I really wasn't expecting to get myself scared from the summary but DANG! Hehe I don't know if you're gonna take it as a compliment or not after that sentence but I just wanna let you know that your story freakin scared the hell outta me! Please make more!

wow! i love this story! horror's always been my favorite, never been scared by it, always laughed at it...my friends and parents think i'm an evil killer demon... any way, this story's great! i will obey the copyright rules and hope that this someday gets turned into a longer movie.