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| Nemonus 2007-07-03 ch 1, | abuseInteresting. It coverts both fantasy life and the possibly resultant absentmidedness, which is interesting--and disturbingly truthful. You do have some spelling problems and a repetition of the word "display". There are good descriptions, fantastical almost, like "batting slate toes before me." |