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Nemonus
2007-07-03
ch 1,
abuseInteresting. It coverts both fantasy life and the possibly resultant absentmidedness, which is interesting--and disturbingly truthful. You do have some spelling problems and a repetition of the word "display". There are good descriptions, fantastical almost, like "batting slate toes before me."
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