That's so sad, but it happens all the time. Nice work.

Twilight Starr

It's very good, and a different sort of short story. I like how you put in how she'd act different, just to make him jealous, cause people really do do that. Nice roundabout, as someone else said.

I love the roundabout way that poem worked. The way you ended it with the beginning. I've always been a sucker for that particular style.

I remember when you sent this to me

over the phone awhile back.

_

I like the images it fills my

head with. and the feeling of

deception. very intense.

I dislike the source of the piece.

stupid boy.

but nonetheless. 'applause' on

a nice piece of poetry.

I am in love with this.

Its absolutely perfect, I have been trying forever to write a poem such as this and can't quite grasp the correct feelings.

but this

this is art