AWW...

That is just...so...touching! Really, really sweet...AWW...

So cool! Rock on! :)

I particularly like the way you used personal pronouns ("us", "we"), to give a more intimate feel to the story...cool. ^_^

[Yes, it's been a while, all right, since I last passed your profile o.o; Too bad about Our Final Prayer for Dust...]

Rock on! :)

As promised, I've returned. Hi.

"barrels of fresh flowers and pickled philosophers" I like the reference to Diogenes, unless it was unintentional... Either way it's good.

"Have you killed your God and/or your reason for living today?" Ah, Nietzsche, nihilism, absurdism - how delightful. I'm quite overcome.

"There is just too much loneliness in the Extensive Directory. Daily, it is shed from the scalp of the world like so much dandruff." As it's practically the opening line, this is a little weak compared with what you're obviously capable of. It's mainly the second sentence, actually. The simile and even the metaphor you link it to seem almost forced, I think. But I have no idea how it could be improved.

"The ghostman in his ice-chippy underground refrigerator of a lair is lonely." This is a very simple statement but it's weighed down by the amount of syllables. Maybe something more like 'The ghostman in his ice-chipped underground refrigerator-lair is lonely', possibly. Maybe that's not an improvement on second thoughts, but as it is, it's an awkward way of phrasing it.

The repetition of 'black' when describing the corpse-sucker (not an image I wanted in my head, particularly) wizard person is well-used. And 'fulminates' is a nice word.

You'd need to do more than refrigerate a corpse to stop it from decaying during those two years, though. Freezing usually works, I'm told.

"We can see her glistening through the steam, slick and brown and slender, with her arms tracing lines of song above her head. Her eyes are closed, caged in sensation. She does not think, she cannot think." That's some talent you have, I think it'd be fair to say.

At first I didn't see why you split it into 2 chapters, but having thought about it I can see the sense. The break is good.

Like I said in the other review, I love your style. It's so fluid and sinuous and almost delicate. It's similar to the way several of my favourite authors write, but is still unique enough to be enticing. Nice use of thematic stuff too, and you use it consistently, which makes it even better.

Well I'm tired and I've run out of things to say.

Amazing work, to summarise. I guess I may as well just favourite you instead of each specific story. So I will.

~The Dream Unicorn